"Communicate 4.2.1 – Feedback" Quest

"Communicate 4.2.1 – Feedback" Quest

This email response assignment is one that I use in my GAVS AP French course to practice for the free response item that the students will encounter on the AP College Board Exam. I assign this using Flipsnack, where there are directions, email prompts, and tips for preparing the assignment as well as for preparing to do the task on the day of the AP exam.

I wanted to embed the item here, but I have a free Flipsnack account and do not have that ability. Instead, here is a link to the Flipsnack:
http://www.livebinders.com/play/play?id=1905139&backurl=/shelf/my


Here is the rubric that I use to give feedback for this assignment. It is copied from the AP Scoring Guidelines.

2016 Interpersonal Writing: Email Reply AP® FRENCH LANGUAGE AND CULTURE

Graded ByTara Ingle

Criteria	Level 5 Strong 5 points	Level 4 Good 4 points	Level 3 Fair 3 points	Level 2 Weak 2 points	Level 1 Poor 1 point	Level 0 Unacceptable 0 points	Score and Feedback
Criterion 1	Maintains the exchange with a response that is clearly appropriate within the context of the task	Maintains the exchange with a response that is generally appropriate within the context of the task	Maintains the exchange with a response that is somewhat appropriate but basic within the context of the task	Partially maintains the exchange with a response that is minimally appropriate within the context of the task	Unsuccessfully attempts to maintain the exchange by providing a response that is inappropriate within the context of the task	Mere restatement of language from the stimulus	2 points
Criterion 2	Provides required information (e.g., responses to questions, request for details) with frequent elaboration	Provides required information (e.g., responses to questions, request for details) with some elaboration	Provides required information (e.g., responses to questions, request for details)	Provides some required information (e.g., responses to questions, request for details)	Provides little required information (e.g., responses to questions, request for details)	Mere restatement of language from the stimulus	2 points
Criterion 3	Fully understandable, with ease and clarity of expression; occasional errors do not impede comprehensibility	Fully understandable, with some errors which do not impede comprehensibility	Generally understandable, with errors that may impede comprehensibility	Partially understandable, with errors that force interpretation and cause confusion for the reader •     Limited vocabulary and idiomatic language	Barely understandable, with frequent or significant errors that impede comprehensibility	Completely irrelevant to the stimulus	3 points
Criterion 4	Varied and appropriate vocabulary and idiomatic language	Varied and generally appropriate vocabulary and idiomatic language	Appropriate but basic vocabulary and idiomatic language	Limited control of grammar, syntax, and usage	Very few vocabulary resources	Completely irrelevant to the stimulus	2 points
Criterion 5	Accuracy and variety in grammar, syntax, and usage, with few errors	General control of grammar, syntax, and usage	Some control of grammar, syntax, and usage	Limited control of grammar, syntax, and usage	Little or no control of grammar, syntax, and usage	“I don’t know,” “I don’t understand,” or equivalent in any language	2 points
Criterion 6	Mostly consistent use of register appropriate for the situation; control of cultural conventions appropriate for formal correspondence (e.g., greeting, closing), despite occasional errors	Generally consistent use of register appropriate for the situation, except for occasional shifts; basic control of cultural conventions appropriate for formal correspondence (e.g., greeting, closing)	Use of register may be inappropriate for the situation with several shifts; partial control of conventions for formal correspondence (e.g., greeting, closing) although these may lack cultural appropriateness	Use of register is generally inappropriate for the situation; includes some conventions for formal correspondence (e.g., greeting, closing) with inaccuracies	Minimal or no attention to register; includes significantly inaccurate or no conventions for formal correspondence (e.g., greeting, closing)	Not in the language of the exam	4 points
Criterion 7	Variety of simple and compound sentences, and some complex sentences	Simple, compound, and a few complex sentences	Simple and a few compound sentences	Simple sentences and phrases	Very simple sentences or fragments	Blank	3 points
Overall Score	Level 6 47 or more	Level 5 39 or more	Level 4 31 or more	Level 3 23 or more	Level 2 15 or more	Level 1 0 or more	Score and Feedback
							18 points

Transfer rubric feedback to general feedback for the assignment.


Here is a sample of written feedback that I also give on this type of assignment. The comments include links for help in areas where students are weak. First I provide a link to a document that the student can download which contains the same feedback that you see below the link:

2/12

Priya Ecriture 1.2 feedback.docx

**Be sure to go to the bottom of this feedback and click on “Assessment Details” to see the actual rubric.

Regarde mes notes qui t’expliquent des choses notables et des choses qui te limitent à ce niveau:

Chére[TI1] Mademoisselle,

Je serai heureux que ma candidature ait su vous convaincre et me permette de vous rencontrer lors d'un entretien à votre convenance. Dans cette perspective, je vous saurai gré, Madame, d'accepter mes respectueuses salutations[TI2]  Je serai hereux de faire partie du programme d’échange. Je[TI3] aimerais vivre en Ethiopie , parce que il est un très bel endroit . Il a une belle culture et beaucoup de gens et il fait chaud toute l'année. [TI4] J’aimerais X[TI5]  avec quelqu’un qu’ils sont[TI6]  gentils et sympathiques. Je ne pas[TI7] avoir[TI8]  des préférences ! Ce serait[TI9]  un honneur de travailler avec vous et votre programme !

En espérant vous avoir convaincu de ma motivation, veuillez m'informer le plus vite possible. Si tu[TI10]  avez des questions pour moi, n’hesitez pas à demander[TI11]  ! Merci pour votre temps !

  Amicalement[TI12] , Priya 

 [TI1]Do not use Cher/ Chère in formal communication.

 [TI2]Remove this from the beginning of the message.

This is a correct “formule de politesse” but it is used at the END of a correspondance, just before signing “Sincèrement”. It is also quite hard to memorize. You are welcome to select something easier, such as, “ Dans l'attente de votre réponse, je vous prie d’agréer, Madame, Monsieur, mes sincères salutations. » for the end.

 [TI3]Elision

http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Elision_(French)

 [TI4]While all this is probably true, it is too generalized. You must show specific knowledge of the culture. Maybe on the day of the exam, you will get a prompt about which you know nothing and then something this vague will have to do. However, for this course, use the opportunity to research and learn more about cultures so that you can respond with pithy answers and so that you can put the information into your brain for a rainy day (i.e. exam day). J

 [TI5]Il faut un verbe à l’infinitif.

 [TI6]Qui est gentil et symphatique

 [TI7]Negation

http://www.lepointdufle.net/ressources_fle/negation_regle.htm

http://www.laits.utexas.edu/tex/gr/neg1.html

 [TI8]il faut conjuguer le verbe au présent.

 [TI9]Bonne utilisation du Conditionnel!

 [TI10]Il faut la langue soutenu.

 [TI11]Veuillez me les poser et je répondrai assez tôt que possible.

 [TI12]This is too informal. Please visit the links included for the “formule de politesse” for examples of appropriate closings.

Here is a sample of a submission from a previous class. It has some problems too but is more in line with the format that we are seeking. Be sure to read my comments to the student to see what was good and what needed improvement: example Ecriture 1.2 feedback.docx

2/1 Priya, there are two issues: This is not the correct assignment and the labeling of your file name is not acceptable. 

It seems to me that you still have not yet watched the Welcome Chat where assignment modification directions were explained and distributed via our Live Binder link. Here are the directions for this assignment:

AP Ecriture Flipsnack (Courriel)

http://apinglefrench.flipsnackedu.com/browse/fxcfbl5k

Please resubmit before the deadline for full credit. Merci!